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Wednesday 21 October 2020

Night of the Musem

 



Toby didn't want to go to the museum but he had too anyway cause his baby sister and his older sister wanted to cause it had free wifi there then he went behind a corner and then he saw an elephant come out of a painting.  He ran to go and tell his sister and mum but they didn't believe him so Toby showed both of them but they did not see anything so Toby turned and the elephant was gone. Then when they left he saw a saber- toothed tiger and it was about to attack Toby but a museum cop came and they saber- tooth tiger disappeared but left ink. Then Toby left the area to look at other things he saw cavemen. And a T-Rex Toby was scared he was going to get chomp into pieces but the dinosaur was kind to him. Then when a woman came up to him he dropped into ink just like the saber - toothed tiger did. Then elephants came out of nowhere and then Toby jumped on one of them. They were having so much fun there then he saw free ice cream. He went to go and eat it then a cheetah scratched Toby on the face. And his eyes went sharp and he was drooling then Toby realized the cheetah was going but to its animal instincts. Then he left but the cheetah and the animals couldn't leave the museum toby ran all the way home.  Then when he was there again last night he saw the cheetah but it was bloody then Toby ran to it then the cheetah ate the gorilla. Then it was going to eat Toby but he slammed into ink again. It was getting to the afternoon so Toby ran back home then Toby went to his bed and faked sleeping then his mum told Toby to get up then she saw the claw mark from the cheetah on Toby's pj’s. His mum screamed and fainted for the next ten minutes. She woke up and Toby had a shower and he was brushing his teeth. He went down stairs to have breakfast then he saw his sister and other sister we're already there they were eating then Toby ran outside and went to the museum again. Then Toby's mum woke up and ran down the stairs but by the time she got down the stairs Toby had already left. He brang a bag too with snacks and a flashlight and a pillow and a blanket. And he was sleeping in the security room. He locked the door just in case the animals would try and hurt him. Then Toby was on his ipad then he heard footsteps so he put it back in the bag. Then he had a look at the keyhole in the door and it was a caveman. He walked past the door but he threw a rock at the door. Then the cave man came closer to the door then Toby opened the door and the cave man was knocked out and quickly grabbed the body before it hit the floor he put it inside the security camera room with him. But then he didn't want to go to the museum anymore he shouldn't have stayed home with his mum and sister. He went back to the iPad playing games and watching YouTube and eating lollies and chips and he was drinking fizzy and watching Netflix then he went to sleep then he got up he needed to make a plan to go back home. He already had everything in his bag cause he was going to paint his bully’s house pink. He went out of the camera room and then he got his bat out and wacked the animals every single one in his way he ran out but then he was cornered from the tiger. But the tiger let him go through so Toby realized their wildness was wearing off. So it was Toby's chance to run away home but somehow the can run out of the museum and then Toby locked all the doors around his house he told his mum and sister they needed to hide some were safe from animals. They hid in separate wardrobes then the animals came inside and they were looking for Toby but they found him so they went back to the museum cause the sun was coming back so after they left Toby told them everything he did. His mum grounded him for a week -LAST DAY UNTIL HE IS AN GROUNDED- Toby was ready for school but his mum told him that he was grounded early he was happy but he was wondering what happened to the animals he saw his sister is eighteen years old now. And his younger sister is ten years old. But Toby's best thing he did when he was younger was to remember the night of the museum the end. 

1 comment:

  1. Kia ora Kahurangi.
    I started to read your story but found it hard to understand.You are missing a lot of punctuation and it's hard to read it without it.You have some great ideas.Maybe next time just write a smaller amount and re-check it to make sure that it makes sense and add punctuation where it's needed.

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